2018 MCAS
Grade 8 English Language Arts
Question 16
Standard English Conventions - Score Point 3
Consistent control of conventions is evident throughout this narrative. Sentence structures, grammar, and mechanics are mostly correct and appropriately complex: "I know that's a horrible thing to think, but I can't help myself. The son that he left was basically drowning, even though he had grown up at the ocean." Sentence variety demonstrates fluency and adds to the effectiveness of the writing: "[Whenever] he visited his father[,] it was only for a few days. Now, who knows how long! A week? A month? A year? Forever?"
Idea Development - Score Point 5
The narrative provides a full and insightful account of characters and events from Keo's point of view. Details from the text are skillfully chosen and woven throughout the narrative as the writer stresses Keo's emotional response to Sonny's going to live with his father. Direct quotes from the text are complimented by specific internal reflections that Keo is having, such as "I slipped out of my tube and called to Sonny, 'Come on out.' Sonny was never the greatest swimmer, and didn't like to be out in the deep waters. All he needed was some encourage[e]ment." This approach allows the reader to see Keo's view of events and understand his deep feelings: "But whether he could swim or not, I know that I love that little guy more than anyone ever would, including his father. He was like my brother." Skillful organization and description support the effectiveness of the narrative, as imagery in the introduction is mirrored in the conclusion: "Up, down, up down," contrasting feelings of contentment and grief. The writer demonstrates full awareness of the task and narrative mode.
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