2018 MCAS
Grade 6 English Language Arts
Question 24
Idea Development - Score Point 5
The central idea of the essay is insightful, focusing on the discomfort and loneliness felt by Rinko and the speaker as a result of the expectations of family and peers. Evidence is skillfully selected and explained, clearly supporting the central idea. For example, Rinko is "'bound up in a silk cocoon and could hardly bend down.'" The discomfort manifests itself metaphorically as "Rinko is literally constricted with the Kimono and the Japanese way of life," and the speaker in Somewhere Among says, "'I am between two cultures, two languages, two time zones every day.'" The essay explains that "she [the speaker] is not comfortable with being a supposed 'half or double.'" Ideas are skillfully organized and explain the stages of the characters' feelings. The second body paragraph presents their experiences with loneliness. The conclusion extends ideas that the narrator and the speaker are "so much more than two races" and elaborates on the message that to "feel happy and complete . . . you have to feel proud of who you are." The writer demonstrates full awareness of the writing task.
Standard English Conventions - Score Point 3
The essay demonstrates consistent control of a variety of sentence structures. Consistent control of grammar, usage, and mechanics is evidenced. The few minor errors do not detract from meaning.
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